Talk:Forbidden Hide & Seek/@comment-28442606-20180227160316

It isn't a big deal, but I have a couple nitpicks with the translation.

再世のEscape心臓がDancing再誕のParadigm 真相はFiction

Like half the words in this part were just...added in? I guess in an attempt to make it flow better, but "knowing" "follow" "start" etc isn't in the original text. It is a personal preference, but I think it sounds better more separated, without forcing it into a coherent sentence. "Reincarnation Escape"/"Your heart is dancing"/"Rebirth paradigm"

秘密のお願いを　叶えてくれる

The direction of this is flipped. "I'll make your wish come true" would be ~teageru. Fairly certain the moon is still the subject of that action (eg somethign like "before the moon meets the climax, it will grant your secret wish)

バラバラ砕け散った　ジュエルの欠片 灰にして High にして 解き放つ本能のまま

This part could just flow better. Instead of "take" the jewels and "turn it all" maybe just "Turn the smashed and scattered jewels into ash..." ((or if you leave it the same at least change it to them because jewels is plural))